Following my ‘5 Step formula for the perfect Dating Profile’ (this will be broken down on my blog over the coming weeks, but can be seen in it’s entirety in 5 separate posts here) , I will analyze two match.com profiles below.
My 5 Step formula:
1) Photos, smiling, clear 3 minimum – face, full body and action
2) Introduction – opening gambit
3) What you offer
4) What you are looking for
5) Invitation to connect
This week’s Positive Profile –
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Username: micharobby Derbyshire
‘I am a romantic, loving guy who wants to get the most out of life. I have a professional career, a lovely home, good friends and a happy life but am looking for that special person to love and share life with. I am an eternal optimist, forever positive, caring, very chatty when you get to know me, witty (so I am told) and romantic.
I enjoy the nice things in life and want to share those things and experiences, but more importantly I love life’s simple pleasures – a walk on a windy Cornish beach, long chats and laughter in a pub with a roaring fire, nights out with friends, nice restaurants, cooking food together, enjoying new cultures overseas, snuggling up on the sofa watching a good film or a comedy with a glass of wine in candlelight, or even perhaps a game of tennis.
My ideal women would be bright, attractive, easy going, honest, sophisticated when needed (whilst being down to earth most of the time), supportive, at times adventurous, witty and loving (not much then); someone to share life’s funny and sad moments with.
That’s me – if you want to know more, just ask.’
Lets break it down to cover my 5 step Formula
1) This guys photos his profile is a smiling head shot, and he has two other photos, both full body. They look like holiday photos. Perfect.
2) Introduction (what’s visible with his profile photo). ‘Looking for someone special to spend my life with. I am a romantic, loving guy who wants to get the most out of life. I ha…’ His first sentence shows he is looking to commit and he’s adventurous. The words ‘romantic’ and ‘loving’ appeal to women.
3) Aside from the sentence above which acts as an intro and part of what he offers, he follows on and actually manages to say quite a lot in a few sentences. He says he has a professional career, a nice home and a happy life, which tells me he’s a confident and secure man. He also says he’s funny and GSOH is high on almost every woman’s list of qualities she’s looking for in a man. His next paragraph is actually very clever because he’s ‘painting a picture’ he’s inviting ladies to visualise the experiences he will offer in a relationship ‘I love life’s simple pleasures – a walk on a windy Cornish beach, long chats and laughter in a pub with a roaring fire, nights out with friends, nice restaurants, cooking food together, enjoying new cultures overseas, snuggling up on the sofa watching a good film or a comedy with a glass of wine in candlelight, or even perhaps a game of tennis.’
4) What he is looking for is clear – ‘My ideal women would be bright, attractive, easy going, honest, sophisticated when needed (whilst being down to earth most of the time), supportive, at times adventurous, witty and loving (not much then); someone to share life’s funny and sad moments with.’
5) Invitation to connect: ‘That’s me – if you want to know more, just ask.’ My only criticism here would be to make it more inviting it would be nice to add to that ‘If you think we might have something in common please email me and say hi, and – if you want to know more, just ask’
I’d give it an 8.5 out of 10.
This week’s Pants Profile –
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Username: Hardhouse – Leicestershire
Hi ive been single for nearly 5years im looking for miss right some1 i can show her a good time i dont bite.
if you wanna chat and wanna toget to know me and you can ask me anythink i wanna meet a nice girl to take out and toget to know her better on a date im a friendly guy easy toget on with .
More about me:
For fun
i always make the most of things but i like helpin out at the British Red Cross and hangin out with my brother.
Favourite hot spots
I havent been traveling much i like going to meet new people when im on the train. go to manchester coventree leeds wanna go somewhere else.
Favourite things
art and films goin out stayin in
Favourite book
dont read books
My job
i dont have a job got lade off im doin retail traning in a shop
1) This guy has 1 photograph. This photograph looks like he has taken it as he is sitting up in bed, before he has got up in the morning, and he’s topless. It’s horrendous. He’s attempting a half smile. It’s a self-portrait. No, no, no!
2) His intro is – ‘Hi ive been single for nearly 5years im looking for miss right some1 i can show her a good time i dont bite For the first sentence to say he’s been single for 5 years, it’s not a selling point, it’s negative. The ‘I don’t bite’ is disconcerting combined with the photo and the rest of the profile. I know it’s an attempt at humour, but it doesn’t work. The grammar/spelling and slang show a lack of education/intelligence.
3) What does he offer? ‘a good time’ oh dear. This sentence will always have the connotation of sex. ‘i dont have a job got lade off im doin retail traning in a shop’ I never suggest lying but there is such a thing as being selective with the truth. ‘I’m currently training in retail,’ would be a better way to say what he’s doing now.
The only positive thing about this profile is that he says he helps out at The Red Cross, which shows a caring nature. However to say he likes ‘going out and staying in’ is incredibly boring, generic and unimaginative. I can see from his profile that he does enjoy meeting new people and that he’s friendly, but the way he has written about how he meets people on the train with the poor grammar and spelling doesn’t suggest there is any quality or depth to his conversation. The fact he doesn’t read books is evident. If he can’t read and/or is dyslexic there is no excuse, as I have said before get someone who isn’t to check your profile, or use ‘Microsoft Word’
4) What is he looking for? ‘i wanna meet a nice girl to take out and toget to know her better on a date im a friendly guy easy toget on with’ – a ‘nice girl’ er who doesn’t? It’s generic, it tells people nothing at all.
5) Invitation to connect – ‘if you wanna chat and wanna toget to know me and you can ask me anythink’ The invitation is there but with the bad spelling and grammar it’s not inviting in any way.
I’d give it a 1 out of 10